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Anybody can use a mobile phone to answer work and personal calls at any time, 7 days a week.

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It is true that the appearance of some advanced technologies, especially the advent of mobile phones, has changed human life profoundly. Some demonstrate that employees answering their personal and professional calls can be positive for both
people
 and human society, but I worry that its disadvantages outweigh its advantages.
Such
phone
 calls are of vital benefit to individuals' relationships and working
efficiency
.
Phone
 calls can help
people
 feel closer.
For instance
, by using a mobile
phone
,
people
 who live alone can communicate with their family members, which may help them feel less lonely.
In addition
, employees contacting by phones can contribute to higher work
efficiency
. Task completed by one person can be reported to the
next
 part immediately, which may decrease the
time
 consumed during the process and contribute to a higher
efficiency
 level.
Time
 saved by increasing working
efficiency
 through
phone
 calls be used to provide high-quality products and services for both customers and society.
On the other hand
, potential drawbacks may
also
 arise because of individuals overusing their phones.
People
 spending too much attention on smartphones may lead to a lack of social connection in reality.
For example
,
instead
 of making appointments with their clients, contacting through telephones may lose a chance to build a strong relationship personally.
Moreover
, overusing telephones may
also
 cause health problems. A late call may disturb employees and reduce their
time
 for rest, which may make them feel tired the
next
 day. Individuals' health may be severely affected if they have to respond to all
phone
 calls at any
time
. In conclusion,
although
 the usage of telephones can bring some benefits, its potential negative impacts can not be ignored
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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