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Band 6.5

Some countries are considering imposing curfews in which teenagers will not be allowed outdoors at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this policy?

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In the era of democracy, the constitution grants citizens to
move
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 freely irrespective of time and place.
Curfew
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 imposed by the government to
control
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 any grave
situation
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 and curbing the right of
teenagers
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 to
move
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 freely during the night is only to protect them. I am positively agreeing with it,I would intend to explain my view in the following essay. Though every individual has the right to go anywhere at any point
of
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 time is enshrined in the constitution ,
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, State has the responsibility to protect its people.
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, to
control
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situation
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 in an area
curfew
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 is imposed to curtail any untoward event and the orders are issued specially for the
teenagers
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 not to
move
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 out without the company of a responsible individual.
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 help to
control
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 the menace at the earliest ensuring the safety of the citizens. With the government acting in full potential to
control
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 the
situation
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also
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 the duty of the people to cooperate in maintaining law and order especially
teenagers
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. At times events occur
such
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 as riots and protests when the life of citizens are at stake. Few situations which
demands
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 to
move
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 like in an emergency
situation
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 where hospitalization is necessary
teenage
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teenagers
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 should be accompanied by
the
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an
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 elderly person.
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, in the case of epileptic attack hospitalization care is needed in
such
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 case should be allowed with adequate protection with security personal by the local police. The government has started 104 services which is a boon for patients in need of emergency care especially during the night and if
curfew
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 is laid down. In conclusion, reasonable restriction during
curfew
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 for
teenagers
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 is good to protect them from unforeseen danger.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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