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Some people think that governments should spend public money on saving minority languages. Others, however, believe that would be a waste of public money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #governments #money #minority #languages #waste
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The financial questions raised by whether
governments
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 funding should be given to
minority
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languages
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 or not are subject to much debate. As far as equity and
efficiency
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 are concerned, I personally believe that it is not a good choice to spend too much on saving
minority
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languages
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.
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 and foremost,
governments
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 only have limited funds that need to support diverse fields and saving
minority
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languages
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 would involve high costs inevitably. Obviously, there are more important areas that
governments
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 need to be concerned preferential,
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 as education, health care, public transport and so forth, which go hand in hand with everyone. If
governments
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 give priority to saving
minority
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languages
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, the investment capital in other fields would decrease dramatically, which would damage the interests of citizens who do not use these
minority
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languages
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.
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 to equity,
efficiency
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 should
also
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 be taken into consideration. Speaking the same language could help to boost the
efficiency
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 of communication, and it is beneficial for cross-regional cooperation and business. In these cases, language would not be a hinder between different areas. Admittedly, cultural diversity could enrich our lives and make our cities more interesting to some extent.
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, my school usually holds some creative activities about diverse
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 to board our sight of various cultures. Simultaneously, language is more than a means of communication, but an important part of the cultural heritage of the people who speak it. The disappearance of
minority
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languages
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 would erode these people’s cultural identity. In conclusion, the negative impacts that stem from supporting
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languages
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 could provoke knock-on consequences of equity and
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,
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 it is beneficial for cultural diversity.
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