Advice for Medical Problems Some people today prefer to get advice for medical problems and do not want to visit a doctor. Why is this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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certain individuals tend to get advice for their medical
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issues
rather than take an appointment
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doctors.
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problem and will explain the adverse aspects of it.
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of curing and advancement in technology are the main causes for eliminating
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physically seeing the doctor.
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, the hospital test fees for
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of people are backbreaking;
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, they tend to treat themselves through consultation when
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contract the diseases.
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webs furnish the necessary data
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associated with medical science, leading to raising public awareness.
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beneficial information
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related to all types of illness. It is for these reasons that people opt to receive a piece of advice for treatment.
On the other hand
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misdiagnosed, it will bring about irreparable harm. To be clear, the online resources are not reliable due to the fact that medical knowledge is a complex
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science
and we should not rely on the
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evidence
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recommended to the specific person.
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although
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in relation
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illness treatment on the internet, it cannot guarantee that we exactly deal with what kind of sickness.
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, the symptoms of our sickness reveal
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cancer according to online resources whilst the fact
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demonstrates
other things.
That is
why meeting the doctors is highly recommended for treatment. to conclude, though getting advice through online networks makes a significant contribution to
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the expenditure, the harmful impact of
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our health is indispensable.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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