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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? *Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.*

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Immigration is very common nowadays. Despite
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 native speaking country could be a special experience , on the other ,
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 could be caused serious social issues like isolation and discrimination , and
furthermore
 practical
problems
 like accommodation and everyday difficulties. In
this
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To begin
 with, people are living in countries, they are not enabled to speak their languages ,are facing isolation.If adults are not able to communicate with native residents they could not make friends and they are living isolated. Sometimes ,
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likewise
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 they have to tackle discrimination
problems
. Citizens of foreign counties could behave to them without respect .Some immigrants,
for instance
 , are facing abuse due to not speaking the language from the country to which they have immigrated. Humankind's ,
secondly
, have to overcome many practical
problems
, by the same token , they could face challenges in their everyday life ,
such
 as , buying goods for supermarkets or finding suitable accommodation.Staying adults , to illustrate, out for the motherland, they are an not find the perfect house because they can express clear their needs. In summary ,I strongly believe that
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immigration would offer a unique experience,
however
, it is enormously challenging due to crucial practical and social
problems
 which people have to overcome.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Communication barriers
  • Misunderstandings
  • Expressing needs
  • Emotions
  • Language proficiency
  • Integration
  • Local community
  • Culture
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