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Write about the following topic: 'Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people's lives and should receive more funding.' To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Almost all the
media
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 outlets cover not only local
news
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 but
also
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 global
news
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. While local
news
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 impacts people in a closer and more relevant way, I do not agree that more budget should be utilized on local
content
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.
Firstly
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, gathering local information, naturally, needs
less
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 resources compared to sourcing
of
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apply
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data from outside.
Secondly
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, local
news
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are
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 limited and excess funding would eventually go to waste. Various types of
cost
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costs
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 go into
sourcing
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the sourcing
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of
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international
news
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. These include expenses for the crew members
such
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 as transportation and accommodation; translators and guides; and even security at war zones, just to name a few. Even if the
broading
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broadening
 stations do not send their own crew, they will still need to pay the local
media
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at
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in
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 other countries for the information that they are receiving.
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, gathering
news
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 locally is less costly as
such
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 expenses will not even incur.
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, it is not necessary to spend more
for
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on
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 local
content
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. No matter how big a country is, there are only so
much
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many
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 happenings in it that are worthy to be in the
news
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.
Additonally
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Additionally
, all the local
media
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 agencies will be covering the same pieces of local
news
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everyday
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every day
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.
Abundent
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Abundant
 funding for internal
content
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 might actually go to waste.
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, if
insufficient
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the insufficient
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 fund is given to the global
news
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 department, it might negatively impact the
media
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 agencies as they could miss out some important global
news
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. To conclude, both local information and internation
content
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 are equally
imporant
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important
 to be covered by the
news
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 agencies. Due to the limited amount of
news
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 to be covered locally and its cost efficiency, I feel that it is not logical to provide more funding for the local
news
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 than what is actually necessary.
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