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some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together to what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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some communities belives that
music
 promotes in bringing people of diverse origin and ages together. I
competely
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completely
 agree with
this
, in the forthcoming paragraph
i
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 will elucidate my opinion with the help of
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 examples As the saying goes,
music
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 got healing power.
Music
 is used for relaxing age across age
group
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groups
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 and cultures.
Music
 creates
healthy
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a healthy
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enviroment
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environment
 which is
condusive
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conducive
 for any relationship to grow or for
childerns
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children
,
music
 promotes in creating a
harmone
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hormone
harmony
 called
dopomine
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dopamine
 in our body which is responsible for our happy mood,
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 as per
survey
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a survey
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 conducted
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by
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my
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by
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Indian
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the Indian
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 Medical association
childern
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children
 who gown in musical
enviroment
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environment
 are more creative and amicable.
Music
 has been instrumental in reversing mental
deprassion
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depression
 and shown positive results in
recovery
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the recovery
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 of
terminal
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 illness.
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, many doctors
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music
 during complex surgery and
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its
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 helps them to focus and
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relieve
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relive
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relieve
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 the stress
on the other hand
 people who
medidate
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meditate
 with
music
 has reported that
its
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 helps them to focus and they feel
relax
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 and calm during the day.
Music
 has been used in ancient times for leisure and relationship building, in old times
secrative
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secretive
 message has been
convayed
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conveyed
 through
music
. In war times for each
action
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 there
was
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diffrent
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different
 forms of
music
, with
music
 people used to
undersatnd
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understand
 the
next
 action
move
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movie
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. To recapitulate,
music
 has been
blessing
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a blessing
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 to mankind and there are
playthor
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play thor
 of benifiderts of
music
 across gender, age and nationality .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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