some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together to what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion

some communities belives that
music
promotes in bringing people of diverse origin and ages together. I
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agree with
this
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will elucidate my opinion with the help of
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examples As the saying goes,
music
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got healing power.
Music
is used for relaxing age across age
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groups
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and cultures.
Music
creates
healthy
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a healthy
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enviroment
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environment
which is
condusive
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conducive
for any relationship to grow or for
childerns
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children
,
music
promotes in creating a
harmone
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hormone
harmony
called
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dopamine
in our body which is responsible for our happy mood,
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as per
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conducted
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my
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Medical association
childern
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children
who gown in musical
enviroment
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environment
are more creative and amicable.
Music
has been instrumental in reversing mental
deprassion
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depression
and shown positive results in
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the recovery
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of
terminal
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illness.
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, many doctors
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music
during complex surgery and
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its
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helps them to focus and
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relieve
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relive
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the stress
on the other hand
people who
medidate
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meditate
with
music
has reported that
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helps them to focus and they feel
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and calm during the day.
Music
has been used in ancient times for leisure and relationship building, in old times
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secretive
message has been
convayed
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conveyed
through
music
. In war times for each
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there
was
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diffrent
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different
forms of
music
, with
music
people used to
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understand
the
next
action
move
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movie
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. To recapitulate,
music
has been
blessing
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to mankind and there are
playthor
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play thor
of benifiderts of
music
across gender, age and nationality .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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