Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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As the more dramatically the
world
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is changing, the bigger disparity between rich and poor becomes. Developed
countries
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are making progress much faster and seem to outweigh the rest of the
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.
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, it is believed that those
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should allow more displaced people coming from other developing
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and provide them with basic assistance like food and accommodation.
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idea before giving my own opinion about it.
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of all, that those
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wealthy
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accept more refugees is really a huge supply of
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force. Indeed, they
are developed
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countries
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that have the smallest rate of newborn
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,
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as Germany, England or France. Especially, the rate of infants in Japan is under 0
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, which will result in a lack of workers for the work environment in the near future. Overmore, providing foreigners with appropriate support will attract more gifted ones coming to work for them. Those who can study and work abroad are the greatest individuals of their
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countries
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Australia
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government is willing to pay all of the
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during
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student's study, and
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, Australia is owning one of the most developing education in all over the
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, too many refugees are truly a threat to the job market of the
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. People come from other
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, and take the jobs that should be belonged to the
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. Take Japan as an example, it is one of the biggest economies,
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, it is
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putting up with the highest rate of unemployment.
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but not least, it can cause a lot of social problems,
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crimes, robbery, violence, etc. In conclusion, the
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of the increasing numbers of refugees remains a heart-touching issue in the eyes of humankind all around the
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, in which the whole global need to cooperate to achieve its disappearance all for the benefit of humans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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