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IELTS Essay, topic: Computers replacing teachers As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

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In 21 digital century, technology affects people’s lives. If the main job of
teachers
 is teaching knowledge and solving problems,
computers
 definitely can do better than
teachers
.
Computers
 can organize large amounts of data, analyze exam questions and check homework in seconds. Those are
teachers
' daily jobs, but
computers
 can easily replace the human brain.
However
, these changes have brought some concern regarding the decrease of
teachers
 in the future. Some people believe
teachers
 will fade out
,
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 because
computers
 have been helping some pupils to design their personal study plans and progress their studies quicker than in an original classroom.
In addition
,
computers
 don’t have personal emotions which treat every student equally, pupils won’t feel any partiality.
However
,
teachers
 are essential for
students
 because human contact influences them in positive ways.
First
,
teachers
 can make pupils feel respect and deserve attention in the learning process, because
computers
 are just machines
which
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 won’t take care of student emotions and understand their study habits.
Besides
,
teachers
 not only teach skills and knowledge
,
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 but
also
 help
students
 learn the importance of
study
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 in a group, which helps them improve their social skills.
Moreover
,
students
 have different intellectual capabilities,
teachers
 should use different teaching methods for different
students
 to avoid some
students
 not being able to keep up.
For example
, they can help
students
 solve questions by repeating explanations or giving extra
exercise
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. Those can avoid
students
 making the same mistakes in subjects. To summarize, there may be
number
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 of benefits of using technology in the classroom but computer technology is simply aiding
to
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the
teaching learning
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 process, it cannot completely take over the role of human
teachers
.
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