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IELTS Essay, topic: Computers replacing teachers As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

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In 21 digital century, technology affects people’s lives. If the main job of
teachers
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 is teaching knowledge and solving problems,
computers
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 definitely can do better than
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.
Computers
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 can organize large amounts of data, analyze exam questions and check homework in seconds. Those are
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' daily jobs, but
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 can easily replace the human brain.
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, these changes have brought some concern regarding the decrease of
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 in the future. Some people believe
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 will fade out
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 because
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 have been helping some pupils to design their personal study plans and progress their studies quicker than in an original classroom.
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,
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 don’t have personal emotions which treat every student equally, pupils won’t feel any partiality.
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,
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 are essential for
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 because human contact influences them in positive ways.
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,
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 can make pupils feel respect and deserve attention in the learning process, because
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 are just machines
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 won’t take care of student emotions and understand their study habits.
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,
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 not only teach skills and knowledge
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 but
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 help
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 learn the importance of
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 in a group, which helps them improve their social skills.
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,
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 have different intellectual capabilities,
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 should use different teaching methods for different
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 to avoid some
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 not being able to keep up.
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, they can help
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 solve questions by repeating explanations or giving extra
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. Those can avoid
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 making the same mistakes in subjects. To summarize, there may be
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 of benefits of using technology in the classroom but computer technology is simply aiding
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the
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 process, it cannot completely take over the role of human
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.
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