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Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believed that having more police on the streets is the best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Criminal records have drastically increased during
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 few
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decades
 in most countries. While some people are expecting a reduction in
crime
 rates by deploying
police
 in every possible location,
rest
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 believe
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 a much preventive
approach
. In my point of view, the strategies to reduce crimes have to be wisely decided by considering both these aspects. It is obvious that there is a high possibility of arresting the verdict if a policeman is
near by
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 to a
crime
 location.
Firstly
, It would be a great help to enforce the law and order, if someone who is having power and authority is monitoring the activities done by
public
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. Even in a court inquiry, the statement of a policeman who was at the
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 location will be
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clear
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evidence
 to penalize the suspect.
However
,
this
 will not
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 to
decreas
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decrease
 the domestic
crime
 rates since it is not practicable to place a
police
 officer in each and every house. At the same time, even allocating
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police
 officers in all public locations is
also
 not an economical
approach
 as a nation. In a preventive
approach
, measures can be taken to
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 and educate the community regarding the law and
consequences
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 of breaking it. The practice of being a good citizen has to be developed since the early childhood of a person.
For example
,
interractive
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interactive
 awareness sessions can be arranged with the support of local
police
 stations in schools or
highier
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higher
 academy institutes.
This
 will eventually create a much quality society where people follow rules and standards.
Finally
, punishment is not the only
recemmended
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recommended
 way of addressing the crimes.
Further
, it is not the most economical method as well. Alternatively, a preventive
approach
 as explained in the
third
 paragraph would reduce the future costs in
recruting
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recruiting
 and deploying
police
 officers all over the locations.
Hence
, a hybrid mechanism of both these methods would be an
ideling
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modelling
idling
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