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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

#spite #advances #agriculture #people #world #case
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necessary
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 in
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 of people’s livelihood and
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. Nowadays, there have been
developing
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 in agriculture.
Although
 it will be enhanced continuously, some countries face
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 problem that their citizens are still staving.
This
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 main cause of arising
this
 trouble, before presenting the possible solutions.
To begin
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importance
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 cause of
starving
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 problem is inadequate money to purchase cuisine. Some undeveloped countries
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not
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 financial liquidity as well as a good policy to tackle
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this
 trouble.
Moreover
, a goods price has a tendency
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 in the trade market.
For example
, Africa is the one of
poor
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 country so they are insufficient food to distribute themselves.
As a result
, Africa citizens are often
illness
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 due to nutrition deficiency.
Therefore
, whether they have
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up-to-date technologies or agriculture advancements,
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 cannot overcome
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starvation if they do not have cash.
Nevertheless
, there
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 still the solution in struggling with starvation.
First
 of all, local governments should control the standard price specification of merchandise which are identified
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 nations.
This
 may aid a population that accesses easier in various goods, which purchases
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 the low-price.
Additionally
, developed or developing countries can assist the undeveloped nation by
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 technology
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 should be suitable with cultivated areas and landscape.
For instance
, China has invented a new material which is regardless
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 natural conditions as a climate change.
Hence
, these solutions are one part of helping
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 extremely. To summarize, it is true that a substantial number of people are suffering
with
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 starvation even
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thought
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 agriculture technology
is utilize
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 at present. Indeed, powerful organizations should collaborate with nations
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 need
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aid.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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