many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. other believe that government should take care of it. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Health
is majorly dependent on
person's
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will or preference or how one wants to lead his or her
our
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life.
However
, I believe
government's
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the government's
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role is essential as well, to bring upfront
healthy
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a healthy
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nation through healthy individuals.
First
and foremost, each and every individual should take care of themselves by opting
healthy
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for healthy
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alternatives and changing their lifestyle.
For instance
,
instead
of consuming junk food like chips, cola, pizza,
etcetra
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etcetera
in heft amount, they can include fresh fruits, coconut water,
vegetables
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etcetra
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etcetera
.
In addition
to
this
doing exercise for 20 minutes, 5 days a week leads to
release
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the release
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of endorphins which
not
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only helpful for their physical or mental
health
but
also
it
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apply
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improves your relationship with their family is along with
this
it
also
enchances
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enhances
the concentration which eventually gives them success at work.
On the other hand
, there are other
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of people who argue that
government
should introduce policies or programmes to aware people
about
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the benefits of
balanced
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diet. Apart from the
government
should compel private institute to
organis
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organise
games or other activities from time to time,
also
follow the same practice in
government
should
also
keep in mind the
health
of vulnerable population like children and pregnant women who
needs
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extra care and assistance.
For instance
, education about iron supplements should be given in school for
adolescents
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girls. In conclusion,
although
government
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the government
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is encouraging people
making
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policies
but
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health
is more of individual responsibility as it is in his or her hand how they want to live their life.
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