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Some people believe that written communication is much less powerful than face to face interaction when it comes to conveying a message. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statemant?

#people #communication #face #interaction #message #statemant
Several people believe that passing information through
emails
 and letters are not powerful as
in
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person
communication
. In my opinion, I agree that
face
 to
face
communication
 is powerful.
However
, there are certain cases where communicating via
emails
 can be powerful
to
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as it depends on the
person
 who is sending out the
communication
. Passing the message in
person
 gets the job done easily and
also
 it enhances the relationship between the parties involved as it gives them
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 to discuss
on
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the various aspects of the message which wouldn't be possible in an online mode of
communication
 like
emails
 or chats.
For example
, suppose a sugar manufacturer wants to get into a business with a sugarcane trader and he meets him in
person
, they might discuss
about
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buisness
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business
 aspects like
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price of the sugarcane, shipping charges, and the manufacturer might understand the problems that the traders have vice versa. They can
also
 go off topic and discuss
about
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their families, about their localities, etc..
this
 helps to build
strong
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 relationship between which wouldn't be possible in case of
mails
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emails
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 or letters.
Although
 communicating
face
 to
face
 can be powerful, in some cases it
doesnt
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doesn't
 matter as the online mode of
communication
 can be effective
to
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as it depends on the designation of the
person
 sending out the
communication
. To illustrate, in a company that has more than 50,000 employees, and with multiple overseas branches it would be impossible for a CEO to communicate with each and every employee
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ain
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in
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person
 , but the message sent out by a CEO would be taken importantly, sending
emails
 can be
benifical
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beneficial
 in
this
 case, as it allows the
managaing
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managing
 partners to manage
thier
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their
 overseas branch remotely. In conclusion, even though the
face
 to
face
communication
 is powerful as it establishes good relationships among the people, it is not is possible in
case
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 of a
gaint
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giant
 organisation with multiple offshore branches, in
such
cases
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emails
 or chats are effective as it allows the management to pass the information quickly.
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