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In spite of technological developments in transportation, many people believe that a bicycle is the best way to reach any destination. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using a bicycle nowadays?

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Most of the individuals think that
bicycle
 is the good method to reach
at
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given
detisnation
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destination
.In
this
 essay,
i
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 will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of
use
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the use
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 of
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the bicycle
a bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 in
modern
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the modern
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 world.The main pros are it is
easily
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 to maintain and
also
 help to reduce the pollution in the surrounding and cons are it required enough
energy
 to ride
at
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particular
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a particular
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 place as well as
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the effect
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effect
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affect
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 the
body
 posture . There are many advantages of riding a
bicycle
.
Firstly
, riding the
bicyle
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bicycle
 can be
maintianed
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maintained
 affordably anytime. It can be repaired by self as the part used in it are not expensive and can be found reasonably in any vehicles shop.
Secondly
,the level of pollution around the
vicinty
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vicinity
 is
also
 under control because the
bicylce
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bicycle
 do not have to depend on
the
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fossil fuels or any other renewable
energy
.
For example
,nowadays
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 of multinational
compamies
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companies
 come up with the policy that if
employee
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employees
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 come to
office
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the office
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 by cycle they will get free holidays package on their vacation every cost will be bear by the company by itself
Furthermore
, another advantage is it
also
keep
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 human being fit physically and mentally. Travelling to any place on cycle burns our
body
 fat apart from
this
 it
also
 keep us energetic too. In the
office
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 we all
the
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day has sedentary seating due to which there
is
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 chances of damaging the posture. in that case,at least we can do some cycling while arriving
to
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 the
office
 and it
also
 motivates
office
colleague
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colleagues
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 to do cycling.
On the other hand
, there are
few
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 disadvantages of cycling .
First
,
person
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a person
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 should eat
healthy
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a healthy
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 diet to keep oneself fit because
person
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need
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 plenty of
energy
 so that he can reach
to
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his
detisnation
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destination
 at the given time. without
energy
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,energy
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 it is not possible to ride and if he does might he can fall on the road, get minor or major injuries on any part of the
body
. due to
lack
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 of
energy
 in the
body
.
last
 but not the least, cycling for
the
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 long time to reach
at
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any destination may harm
our
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 backbone of the
body
. Sitting
on
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same
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 position
more
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 than
hour
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 may
also
 mentally disturb you. To conclude, riding a
bicycle
 will help our physical
body
 and nature
also
 at the same time by not harming it as well there are minor disadvantages .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • eco-friendly
  • cardiovascular fitness
  • urban pollution
  • congestion
  • cycling infrastructure
  • weather dependency
  • vulnerable
  • initial purchase
  • ongoing maintenance
  • secure storage
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