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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Give your opinion.

#employee #employer #attention #qualities #qualifications
These days, there are presumptions
such
 as a great stake of hiring people should take place by giving due consideration to characteristics rather than just the certifications and past experience. I partially agree with the given statement because humans always
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 to upskill themselves and their past plays
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 influential role
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allowing
 the work but not the only part. In my opinion, recruiters should put significant concentration on the fresher's characteristics rather than on experience alone.
To begin
 with,
firstly
, there are a plethora of circumstances that could intervene with
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candidate's
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candidates'
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 educational options
such
 as finances, resources and pressure.
Thereafter
, under the influence of these
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 a student would possibly
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 in a course even if it is not what he wanted.
However
, his motivation and inspiration
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 what makes him learn things.
Secondly
, there is no assurance that an extremely qualified person achieves exemplary things .
Furthermore
, the nature of the person makes him feel accountable for it and guides him to finish it.
For instance
, a friend of mine who hails from a small village with little education because of his interest
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now works on par with
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candidates who hail from top most universities.
Thus
,
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 is not only the deciding factor.
On the other hand
, there are
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 scenarios where
this
 decision could
also
 turn out to be wrong
such
 as making a person from
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 domain work on the finances of the company.
Next
,
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with out
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without
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 proper qualifications or
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 the employee would actually cause a decline in
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 of the company. To illustrate it
further
, an ex-employee of my company who had great technical knowledge was made to work on the
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 marketing side
this
 caused severe disasters to their economy. To sum up, a variety of factors needs to be involved while hiring a newbie. In summary,
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behavioural tendencies
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 to be genuinely valued during selecting a candidate while
also
 being aware
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 their academics and knowledge.
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