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Many government think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people , however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The
evolution
 of a
country
 depends on various factors.
However
,according to many authorities,economic growth plays the most significant role in a region's
evolution
.While
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others opine that there are other sectors that can be accounted for
development
 too.Below , both sides of the argument will be examined with an overall opinion.
To begin
 with, the economic growth of a
country
 proves the residences' living standards and improves the quality of life.When a
country
 experiences economical raises,the lifestyle and every other thing of a residence gets changed too.
For example
,a generation ago,many countries, namely Bangladesh,India had to go through
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immense property. But now these countries are being developed and the proof of their
evolution
 is their economical raises.
On the other hand
,many other instruments
such
 as education, manufacturing system,agriculture, the environment
also
 play a vital role in
development
. Education is considered to be the most powerful weapon which can change the world overnight.No
country
 can witness
development
 with illiterate citizens.
Additionally
, environmental issues are the most encountered concern by most nations.
That is
 to say,if the ministry of a
country
 remains silent on environmental pollution
then
 that nation is far away from getting the taste of
development
. Another point is agriculture and the manufacturing system of a
country
 indicates a lot about its progress.
Therefore
,authorities should look after every factor equally in order to experience total
evolution
. Having considered both sides,I stand with the statement that a
country
's progress is dependent on many things. To sum up,all things considered,it is clear that a
country
 can not only rely on economic expansion.
That is
 to say, no one can define one factor as the prime reasoning behind progress.
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  • socio-economic development
  • quality of life
  • stakeholder
  • sustainable development
  • public sector
  • non-governmental organization (NGO)
  • civic engagement
  • green technology
  • quality of education
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  • global competitiveness
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