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Some people think that technology is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others argue that the opposite is true. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Our generation is known as the generation of
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 and so some
people
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 believe that it is drawing a
gap
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 between a stronger and weaker section of society. I will share my opinion on why I totally agree with
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 statement and will share both views. Nowadays every human depends on
technology
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 in some way or another.
People
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 who have a facility of using
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 equipment of
technology
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 try to help other
people
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 in every way they can. Let me explain it with an example, a few days before we came to know about "baba ka thaba" where there was a poor couple who were not able to earn that much
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 so that they can earn their livelihood and so there was a vlogger who posted their videos on social media and within a week they were able to gather about 5 lakh rupees.
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,
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 is the way
people
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 are helping the poor with the help of
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.
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,
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has created a
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 between the two. Rich
people
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 have the facility of using all the mediums of
technology
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 and they live a luxurious life. They post pictures after attending weddings and other functions which create a sense of discrimination and jealously in the mind of poor
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 and so it is creating a bridge between both sections of
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. In my opinion, A
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 has come between the two because well-to-do have started considering poor
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 for granted. For the
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 has become everything.
Money
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 has made him an egoistic person.
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,
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 in the past if earned too much
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 were not having too many mediums to spend that
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 so they used to spend it on daily wage
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.
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, with the entry of
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 these
people
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 stopped looking towards the poor and now want to spend all their
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 buying all luxurious
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 items for them.
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, these things have made a
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 between the poor and the rich. To conclude, I would say that excess dependency on
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 has created too many differences between the weak and the strong section and it is leading our society to a very critical situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic status
  • wealth inequality
  • infrastructure
  • tech-enhanced learning
  • automate
  • low-skill jobs
  • digital platforms
  • mobile banking
  • financial services
  • e-commerce
  • democratizing
  • marginalized
  • public-private partnerships
  • digital literacy
  • social entrepreneurs
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