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Some people think that women are generally more peaceful than men as their characters are naturally more nurturing than aggressive. To what extent do you agree?

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Women are considered to be the fairer sex.
This
 is many cases is true because they tend to have a more nurturing aura around them. I agree with
this
 notion, and in the course of
this
 essay, I will substantiate my reasoning. Females are considered to be more understanding than men, which is why there are more female teachers than men.
For example
, during my 10th and 11th years in school, we had an Irish male teacher for Bible studies called Mr Macgrath, and he was a very crass, and no-nonsense type of teacher. Everyone was afraid of him, which posed a problem when students had doubts because they didn't know how to approach him.
In addition
 to
this
, because of their nurturing and analytical skills, more and more female police officers are being employed to patrol the streets because they do not have a shoot know and ask questions later type of mentality, which is often seen in men.
For example
, in Dubai, female police officers must accompany female drivers in their driving tests.
This
 helps give the learner drivers a sense of calm and composure whilst they take
this
 test. A study shows that females have better reaction times and survival skills.
Therefore
, they tend to make better decisions in crisis times, which helps in maintaining law and order. In conclusion, there are many situations where having a female present can lower the aggressiveness of a situation, and it is purely because they are less hostile. Of course, there are always exceptions to
this
 rule, but in general,
this
 is the case.
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