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In some countries around the world, men and women are having babies late in life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There are many reasons influencing families to become
parents
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 later in the modern world. Some say that
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 is not a good trend while others argue that it is a new
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 and more adaptable to the modern world. my opinion stands closer to the former statement.
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 with, it is known that the new urban
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 differs in many ways from the traditional
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. in the past,
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 of the
parents
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 (mostly women) were expected to be at home so it was easier to raise a toddler as
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 of the
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 was there to take care of them. an arrangement which lost its value in the modern
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 as both
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 are working in most countries nowadays. to continue, it is important to have in mind that adding a family member requires financial support which is harder because of the consumerist behaviour of citizens.
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, before ,bringing a child to live
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 should think about all the expenses they are going to have.
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 a child with two working
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 needs daycare and pre-education aside from all the nessecury expenses they have. as is said, having children late can have some demerits.
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 of them is the fact that as the
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 are older there is a bigger age difference between them so they are coming from completely deferent backgrounds. to make it more tangible, we can talk about a study which showed that families with younger
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 had more bonds as they could enjoy the same activities together and have more interactions.
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, having babies later in life have many advantages as well.
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 of them is financial support. meaning that as the
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 are older they achieve higher levels in their professional life and have more income so they can think of having extra expenses without the economic burden which young
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 feel so they can spend more time taking care of their infant.
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 in a family where the
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 are not junior staff and can manage to have a more flexible work time children can spend more time with their
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. In conclusion, the new urban
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 had led to many difficulties having a consequence of families having children later.
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 can have both pros and cons but it seems that in
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 new behaviour its assets are more tangible than the liabilities.
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