at the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compered with the number of older people. do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays, the population of some nations the number of young people are a lot more than the aged people. I believe that

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situation the benefits are more than the disadvantages. I would like to discuss both

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essay. On one hand, young adults play an important role in the society as they can

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better at work in many

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as creation,

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increased the GDP of countries.

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, Hong Kong is a city

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rate of GDP because the percentage of X generation is much more than the elder population.

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, new generations have better creation they can

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a better world.

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, the most present technologies

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as the Internet,

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and some effective

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young people.

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, they can

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and lead the nation to another level.

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cause some drawbacks.

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, the education funding might become a serious issue if the government have to support all the children's school feeds from

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is a

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, the cost of marriage and housing commitment are two major

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. Especially in some

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, young

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married

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to the high price of housing that they cannot

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. To sum up, there are some pros and cons with the high rate of young adults in some countries.

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, I believe that the advantages outweigh that the disadvantages.

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