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Successful companies use advertisement to make more sales. What can make an advertisement very effective? Do you think this is a bad thing or a good thing for the society?

#companies #advertisement #sales #society
For today's well-known companies, advertisement is the most powerful tool for making more sales. Many famous companies have made
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advertisement
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advertisements
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in
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the
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several platforms
such
 as social
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media
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medias
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media
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 and
televisions
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television
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 intensely.
Theirs
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 intriguing contents and subliminal advertising
methods
 make them very effective.
Although
 increasing of the profit can be provided by the effect of the
advertisements
 easily, harmful influences of
this
,
such
 as
extravagancy
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, nonsatisfaction and
healthy
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 problems can be realized on the society.
Advertisements
 charming content
enthralls
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people
 deeply and force them to buy it.
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, when
people
 watch
car
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a car
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 video, usually want to buy it even if have one or two. Being
logic
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 may not be easy when we come across
with
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this
 situation and
this
 can cause
to
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us to
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 be extravagant and dissatisfied. Some using
methods
 which is for doing
advertisements
 much more effective can be harmful
for
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the
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people
 mental health.
For example
, when subliminal advertising
methods
 used on
people
 especially for children, can be dangerous for them because they don’t have enough knowledge to evaluate if it is useful or not for themselves. They can easily eat excessive chocolate, sweet.
These kind
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 of
advertisement
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advertisements
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 made them vulnerable and sick.
Many
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 famous
company
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companies
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 make a lot of
advertisements
 to increase their sales and their impressive contents push
people
 to buy it.
Although
 these
methods
 improve firms profit a lot, may affect
people
 badly
in
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mentally and physically.
Therefore
, I
strongly
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am strongly
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 against
the
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advertisements
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