Successful companies use advertisement to make more sales. What can make an advertisement very effective? Do you think this is a bad thing or a good thing for the society?

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For today's well-known companies, advertisement is the most powerful tool for making more sales. Many famous companies have made
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an advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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in
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the
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several platforms
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as social
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media
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medias
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media
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and
televisions
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television
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intensely.
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intriguing contents and subliminal advertising
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make them very effective.
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increasing of the profit can be provided by the effect of the
advertisements
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easily, harmful influences of
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,
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extravagancy
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extravagance
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, nonsatisfaction and
healthy
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problems can be realized on the society.
Advertisements
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charming content
enthralls
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people
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deeply and force them to buy it.
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, when
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watch
car
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a car
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video, usually want to buy it even if have one or two. Being
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may not be easy when we come across
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this
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situation and
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can cause
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us to
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be extravagant and dissatisfied. Some using
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which is for doing
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much more effective can be harmful
for
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people
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mental health.
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, when subliminal advertising
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used on
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especially for children, can be dangerous for them because they don’t have enough knowledge to evaluate if it is useful or not for themselves. They can easily eat excessive chocolate, sweet.
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of
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advertisements
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made them vulnerable and sick.
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famous
company
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companies
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make a lot of
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to increase their sales and their impressive contents push
people
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to buy it.
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these
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improve firms profit a lot, may affect
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badly
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mentally and physically.
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strongly
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against
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