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Living in a country where people have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems

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Globalisation has led to the migration of thousands of people worldwide. Based on the employment statistics released by the United Nations
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 year, 27% of employment was attributed to the international migratory labour forces. Numerous attempts to introduce a global
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 have been in vain in human history.
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 leaves us a big group of migratory workers in a land with a foreign
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. Though
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 sounds like a trivial topic, it has been known to cause deeper impacts
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 society. We will discuss how
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 and parenting could be at stake in
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 is a challenging task.
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, it could take years to master the new bag of vocabulary and use it effectively in day-to-day conversations.
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 has kept away many foreigners from building personal relationships with local peers. Being distant from family and friends, these outsiders feel deprived of human contact to share the emotional stress leading to loneliness which is often termed as
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 in psychological terms. Suicides, decreasing matrimonial rates, and failure to perform well in professional life are certain side effects of
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.
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 acts like a pond of quicksand
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 and makes it more difficult for people to cope up with it.
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,
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 has a deeper impact on the
culture
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 of any region. A person moving into the land of unknowns
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 has to assimilate themself and their family with
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 new
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. Studies represent, a whopping 83% of migrated persons marry someone from the country of their origin. Parenting kids in
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 foreign
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 is a big challenge. While kids learn the local
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 at school and within social circles, they end up learning completely new etiquettes at home.
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 tug-of-war in the ideology causes these kids to be a victim of low confidence and sometimes, inferiority complex with the same aged population. Younger generations with the aforementioned shortcomings are more prone to lead an unsuccessful life. To conclude, as stated, living in a country where people have to speak a foreign
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, can have long-lasting psychological impacts on the person as well as the upcoming generations.
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