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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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During the fourth industrial revolution, technology has become not only a crucial part of life but
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 has a significant impact on human’s career path. As opposed to the past,
people
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 nowadays use more modern devices
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 as laptops,
phone
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 and 4G to start working at
home
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, we no longer need to travel to the workplace. One of the benefits of working at
home
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 through computer or phone is that it can reduce the time of going to
office
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. Since many countries had developed,
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 populated area suffers from traffic jam which holds off workers from getting to
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 on time.
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, employees can have
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 for breakfast,
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increase
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 the ability to be satisfied and focus on their job. There are lots of function of these devices which
people
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 at
home
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 will have more flexibility,
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, zoom becomes the best app when the COVID-19 pandemic that encouraged teachers to teach from their own room.
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, there are still some limits to take into concern. Internet indeed is needed for online
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 and it will become a problem for workers who do not have internet access or have to pay a large bill for it.
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, relationships between employees or teams may not develop cause
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 tend to
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 alone.
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,
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job
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jobs
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 may just deal with customers, and there are not any creative and competitive environments
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 may lead to dissatisfaction. In conclusion, more and more
people
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 are attracted to working online from
home
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 through computers, mobile and the internet because of its convenience
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 as
save
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 time and
reinforce
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work
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 productivity.
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, it
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 reduces the interpersonal connection in some
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 and workers are may not develop teamwork skills.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • remote work
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cost savings
  • productivity
  • isolation
  • distractions
  • technology issues
  • work-life boundaries
  • burnout
  • networking opportunities
  • sustainability
  • office resources
  • cybersecurity concerns
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