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some people believe that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. others believe that it is getting easier. discuss both views and give ur own opinion.

#people #cities #ur
Why do people always miss their
childhood
? I think it’s because
that is
 the only
time
 when we are free of worries, tensions, and stress. We know that our parents would take care of any problem we face. It is
also
 because after
childhood
 we are never able to spend that much
time
 with our family again. Are kids happier than adults? Why? Yes, I believe most people are happier during their
childhood
 and it’s because of the same reason, they don’t have to face the responsibilities and stress of adult life. Why do people still remember many of their friends from primary school? I think it’s because of the amount of
time
 we spent with them. We never spend as much
time
 with friends during adulthood because of work.
Also
, because we all like to reminisce
our
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childhood
, and friends from primary school are a big part of our
childhood
. What kinds of primary school teachers will impress students? Creative teachers who think out of the box, especially when it involves new apps and technologies in the classroom will impress students.
Besides
, teachers who are polite and easily understand the problems of children will impress students too.
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