Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Over the
last
two or three decades, many nations have been giving more attention to
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to
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their's financial breakthroughs and they think that
this
is a vital objective in order to reduce the
poverty
. Some folks think that there are other kinds of development
also
the utmost
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such
as infrasture improvement, education, hospital amenities.
This
essay discusses both viewpoints for the following reasons. On the one hand, giving more attention
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improving
economy
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can be reduced to
the
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poverty
in order
to
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country's
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the country's
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citizen
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citizens
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might live a good lifestyle.
In other words
,
country's
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economy is
the
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vital aspect for every nation because
this
can only decide how much amount of money would be sent to other sectors. Taking developed states
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instance, these governments have more focused on economic progress,
consequently
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their's citizens have been enjoying
to
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all the amenities as well as the
poverty
ratio are very less than developing nations.
Therefore
, the governments give more attention
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developing
state's
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financial status.
On the other hand
, there are other types of breakthroughs
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the same level of
an
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essential for a territory. Education and hospital
is
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the basic fundamental needs for human,
hence
the ministry should be given more importance on
these sector
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too.
For instance
, in Singapore,
this
ministry gives free
eeducation
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education
and hospital amenities for their residents,
this
is a small nation to compared other countries, even though they
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because
this
territory has been giving more focus on
country's
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infrastructure development too. Obviously, other parts are equally significant
aspect
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for every empire. To conclude, financial improvement is the vital factor of every empire. Reducing the
poverty
is the vital goal for giving more focus on economic progress, there are some other types of breakthroughs
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equally
utmost
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significant
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for each and every
nations
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nation
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. In my opinion, about
this
, the ruling party should be given more
concenration
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concentration
on other kinds of advancement like basic needs.
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