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Some people advocate the death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of the death penalty and give your opinion.

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There are those who support the
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 as pertinent for criminals who commit violent crimes, while others believe it to be intolerable in modern-day society. In my opinion,
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 the
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 is perhaps the ultimate deterrent to recurring crime, there are more drawbacks than benefits. The main advantage of keeping the
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 is that it deters violent crime. It is justified as
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, and fair punishment for heinous crimes like
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-degree murder, genocide or the abuse of minors. For victims’ families, it provides restitution since murderers on
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 row cannot recommit violent crimes. For the state, it provides an attractive alternative to
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 in prison due to the costs that can be saved.
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, America has one of the highest prison populations in the world and those locked away for
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 cost the most to maintain in jail.
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, I believe that the drawbacks of capital punishment outweigh the benefits. For one thing, the absolute nature of capital punishment means there is no going back if innocent people are condemned. Once someone is gone, they are gone and there is no reprieve if a person is wrongly convicted.
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, there is little if any research to show that the
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 reduces crime. Research shows that states in America without the
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 have lower murder rates than the states that have it.
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, of felons who are sentenced to
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, few actually receive it.
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 penalties can take decades to enact in some cases, costing the taxpayer as much as placing the concerned individual in prison for
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. To reiterate, the
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 seems an impractical and expensive option for modern society with likely better options available to manage crim

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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