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Success in business can be assured if you have great marketing and promotion. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Thanks to modernization, every single part of our lives has been altered significantly, the same can be said for running a successful business. a group of individuals is of the opinion that in the era in which we are living, advertisements play a crucial role in leading a trade toward progression.
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, I completely disagree with
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 statement.
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 the influence of marketing on our choices is undeniable, it cannot guarantee high achievements, since many people consider it as a singularly reckless mission and they believe most of them use tricky slogans.
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, they are flashy but poor in quality. So in my viewpoint, the only thing that can ensure success in different businesses is nothing but the main product or service.
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, BENZ Company which is an imposing car manufacturer, rarely promote its vehicles on TV or billboards, because the more qualified they are produced, the more enthusiastic the customers will be about buying them.
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, most of the promotions are tempting and misleading, even the information given by them is often misinformation.
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, I bought a cutting-edge gadget
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 year based on the ads, which did not fulfil my expectations and soon after my purchase I realized that I did not even need
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 a hi-tech device,
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 why that people’s trust in them has been destroyed gradually and they are not always effective tools to ensure the favourable outcome. To sum, as many marketing methods want to sell their goods at any price –showing unrealistic features and providing their customers with unnecessary needs their influence has been decreased significantly and I suppose they are not key factors in getting desired results anymore.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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