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Some People Say That The Best Way To Improve Public Health Is By Increasing The Number Of Sports Facilities

#people #health #sports #facilities
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According to some
people
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, building more
sports
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 centres is the best solution to improve the
health
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 and
fitness
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 level of
people
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 while others insist that
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 measure alone will not help. In my opinion,
fitness
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 centres will definitely enhance public
health
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 if
people
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 use them properly.
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, unless they
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 follow a balanced
diet
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, exercising alone will have no real impact on their
health
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 and
fitness
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.
People
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 living in rural areas have ample opportunities to lead a physically active life and
health
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 problems are not very common among them.
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 is not the case in cities where
people
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 live in cramped apartments and take the bus or car to travel even short distances. Building more
fitness
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 centres like gymnasiums and
sports
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 clubs in urban areas will definitely encourage more
people
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 to get out and flex their
muscle
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muscles
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. Studies have shown that regular exercise helps
people
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 burn excess calories and
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 prevents
health
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 problems like obesity, diabetes and cardiac issues.
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, exercising alone will not help.
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 to being physically active,
people
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 need to follow a nutritious
diet
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. They should eliminate junk food from their
diet
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 and replace it with fresh
home cooked
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 meals.
People
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 should
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 avoid habits like smoking and drinking as these are known to cause liver damage and various cancers.
In other words
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, building more
sports
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 facilities will improve public
health
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 only if
people
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 make healthy changes to their
diet
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 and lifestyle. To conclude, in order to be healthy and fit
people
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 need to eat right and exercise regularly. If they consume a lot of junk food, they cannot improve their
health
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 by simply spending hours in the gym.
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, in my opinion, building more
sports
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 facilities is definitely a good idea, but if
people
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 do not watch their
diet
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, they will not gain much from using the
sports
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 facilities.
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