Today, people are getting greedy and selfish. Some people argue that we should go back to the old days and show respect for the family and community, so that we can make the world a better place to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are controversial perspectives heating a debate over our lifestyle. While some hold a strong view that
people
become more and more greedy and selfish currently, some claim that we should turn back to the past and show our respect for family and society in order that the world will be more livable for all residents. I consider myself
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an opponent of these ideas. Doubtlessly, in terms of the previous generation, families and relatives play a paramount significance in their
life
, which encourages
people
to surmount all of the
life
issues and deal with the problems coming up unexpectedly. In specific, the former
people
are aware that beloved members are willing to help them immediately, including tangible and sentimental benefits. My story can be a compelling example
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this
. My grandfather always told me about his
life
, which was
also
about his family, how they shared and cared for each member or even the encouragement they provided to boost the confidence of their beloved members with a view to helping them confront problems.
On the other hand
, from the time being, we tend to live more independently, which is working separately for individual profits and
lastly
, we blame
this
undesirable phenomenon for the generation gap and misunderstandings.
In addition
, we gradually change our attitude towards families, which not only breaks down
the
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family solidarity but
also
leads to
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social relationships.
Therefore
, reviving
the
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respect and affection for
family
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is extremely necessary. While the merit of expressing respect to
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is widely acknowledged, each current individual
also
ought to dedicate themselves to the community’s advantages. Back
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the old days, it was obvious that public benefits were taken into consideration prior to carrying out any work, which made the society become more livable.
In contrast
, in
this
age, so greedy are
people
that they may engage in illegal activities in order to their own surplus expansion.
For instance
, there is a variety of merchants
eran
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earn
handsome incomes from manufacturing unqualified products and coax consumers into purchasing it though it is not necessary.
Moreover
, some businesses even refuse to plough back a fraction of their revenues to the community’s benefits
such
as helping homeless
people
, parentless children. While it is true that our community still has generous
people
who are willing to help all walks of
life
, we cannot deny that the number of
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people
is significantly higher than in the past. To sum up, due to
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egoism we are now worsening our relationship between
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and our families and
also
society.
Hence
, in my opinion, we should avoid the loss of household unity by reconstructing the concept of family and community like what
people
in the past used to with a view to making a better place for future generations to live.
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