Many working people get little or not exercise during the work day, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In the present era, workout has become almost extinct from the life of an individual because of their hectic schedule.
Cosequently
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Consequently
, it started depreciating one's fitness. There are multiple causes for it
such
as bad time management skills and less financial capabilities and a possible solution for it could be
self realisation
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and initiatives by the authorities. I will explain it in detail
further
.
To begin
with, primarily, the major influencing factor is lack of time. People in their busy jobs could not afford ample time for working out.
Secondly
, economical status
also
plays a crucial part owning to the fact that gym and other modes of
exercises
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do require a membership which is quite expensive for a
commom
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common
man.
For instance
, a friend of mine who though had
keen
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interest
on
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his fitness could still not work towards it because he could not bear that kind of
fees
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.
Thus
, these things do have a great impact on
lives
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of many which needs to be mitigated.
On the other hand
, a practical mitigating measure is
self motivation
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self-motivation
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.
Firstly
, no one can drive a person to be fit.
Further
, it has to come
with in
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within
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himself and for
this
to happen he needs to be aware of both possible pros and cons.
Secondly
,
government
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the government
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should provide few recreational facilities and public places at no cost as it would aid people to make use of them for whom money is the constraint. To illustrate it, citizens with low household
income
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incomes
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in my country made great use of
this
initiation by the rulers.
As a result
, it got them into better shapes and be lesser prone to diseases. To conclude, there are many
reason
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for an individual
for
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not
playing
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sports to stay healthier and not have any illness.
However
, if the governments make arrangements for them at no cost it would definitely motivate them to take part in these
activites
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activities
.
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