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Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #jobs #employees
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With the advent of globalization, now
people
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 can go to any part of the world in search of a job.
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, expert
people
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 of the undeveloped
countries
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 can go to rich
countries
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 in search of good opportunities. I totally agree with
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 statement as it will lead to obtaining many multiple profits.
Firstly
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, Skilled and knowledgeable
people
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 from poor
countries
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 going to wealthy
countries
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 will help in improving the economic
condition
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 of the family as well as it will alter the mindset of other members and society
people
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. They too now can think of moving outside the
country
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 and could live a prosperous life.
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, If a person who had good proficiency and is now in a foreign
country
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 gets good pay so his siblings will be able to study and it will
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 switch the mindset of other young siblings and they too will
work
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 hard to achieve success.
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, It too will change the economic
condition
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 of the
country
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 too as well as
employment
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. Now the question arises : How will the job of a few
people
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 alter the economic
condition
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 of the
country
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 and
employment
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 ? While
,
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 lots of
people
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 going abroad to
work
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 one or two will surely think of developing
employment
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 possibility in their own
country
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.After gaining business knowledge from other
countries
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, they surely can open some sort of similar
work
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 in their own
country
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 will eradicate both
employment
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 as well as boost the economic
condition
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 of the
country
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. To conclude, I would say that globalization has encouraged every individual to achieve success and prosperity and In order to generate
employment
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 in poor
countries
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 as well as to strengthen their economic
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condition
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 it will very necessary to
work
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 in wealthy
countries
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.
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