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More and more business as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating.

#business #individuals #technology #face
In
this
 concurrent world,it is an undeniable fact that technology has brought tremendous benefits
for
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 human life. Because of
this
 advancement,
majority
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 of
people
 and occupations are preferred to transmission professionally or commonly by using telecommunications despite
of
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confronting. There are many
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pros
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prons
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pros
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 and cons related to
this
 topic which will be discussed in
further
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 paragraph
whith
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with
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influence
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this
 and leading on for
people
 can easily communicate each other everywhere. Because
this
days
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 large numbers of tech gadgets are available in the market
such
 as mobile phones, computers and so on.which is very beneficial for them who have
work
 or live in other places.
Moreover
, in
this
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 smart
gadgets
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verious
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various
 features are available like calls,video calls so they can easily communicate with each other without
meet
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 them.
Furthermore
,
this
is
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also
 save
a lots
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a lot
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 of time and nowadays many companies
are arrange
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 their meetings on online method.
this
 is beneficial for companies because it
is reduce
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 transportation charges and
also
 save money.
Foe
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 example, in
covid-19
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the covid-19
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 pandemic most of the businesses
work
 online and complete their
work
 by using automation.
However
,
people
 seldom give a lot
thought
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 to pounder over the other side of
story
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 and
that is
 poor connections.
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 rural areas do not have great power lines.
Because of
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this
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those
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 who
work
 in these areas they are facing many network problems. Sometimes when they
work
 under the time limit so
network
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 is most important for them .many major issues accrued in some disaster situations because of
this
 many power lines demolished.
For instance
, in California
big
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 storm was destroyed many communication towers and lines .in
this
 situation many companies are stopped working for
few
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a few
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 months and
also
 their GDP was decreased.
Moreover
,it is create misunderstanding between
people
. Because while communicating
on
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online so they cannot see any facial expression.and
some time
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 using
these
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this technology
these technologies
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technology
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 is very expensive and few
people
 can not
afford
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. In conclusion, the seemingly inexorable debate about
the
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telecommunication can keep going.
Nevertheless
, showing the deep reverence about all the
aspect
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 and observing finer nuance for all matter mentioned
about
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. I espouse to
notion
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the notion
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 for supporting communication there
manny
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many
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 advantages related to
this
 and government should
also
 keep improv network issues

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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