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Some people believe that it is best to do the same type of work throughout your life. Others feel that it is beneficial to change jobs often. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #type #work #life #change #jobs
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It is undeniable that many
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 are like to
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 at the same
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 of
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 since the
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job
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 throughout their life.
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, some people believe that it could be more beneficial for them
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 if they
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jobs
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 often to adjust the
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 base. The following paragraph will be discussing both opinions and my perspective.
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, the conclusion has been reached. On the one hand, those who think that it is best to stay in the same
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 of career until they are retired.
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 group of people have an idea that if they are already good at
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type
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, why do they need to
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 a
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 from the thing that they are familiar with to something that they do not used to it.
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, if they decided to
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 their career or
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 of
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, the
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 will certainly start as same as
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 jobbers which make many people are less likely to
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 their career due to the
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 that will reset again and it will be wasting of their old
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 experience.
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, those who believe that it is beneficial to
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 their
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 often have an idea that the more they
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jobs
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 the more
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 they will be received because changing
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,
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also
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 help them have the unique experience because they had a chance to
work
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 in various field of
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, which will make them run out of
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 once after they make a decision to take a break from the current
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. In summary, both opinions have their advantages and disadvantages. According to my perspective, I believe that we should
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jobs
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 but still
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 in the same field of
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 because
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 will make us have more experience and a higher
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 than before.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Career longevity
  • Mastery
  • Professional growth
  • Job satisfaction
  • Personal development
  • Routine
  • Work relationships
  • Company culture
  • Boredom
  • Stagnation
  • Adaptability
  • Networking
  • Industries
  • Expertise development
  • Job security
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