Online shopping is replacing offline or shopping from stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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It is true that the

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100 years have been a rapid and dramatic development in many areas including technology. With the advancement in technology online shopping sites,

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, Amazon is getting more popular these days. I opine that it is a positive development that has manifold benefits that can be explained in upcoming paragraphs.

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and foremost, e-commerce websites offer varieties of consumer products, goods or foods at one place without visiting physical

shops

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. For an earlier generation, buying food or product involves visiting individual

shops

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each with a limited range of offers. Customers had less money and credit cards weren't widely used.

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, one cannot find electronic items in

a book

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book stores

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stores

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and vice versa. They have to visit individual

stores

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, e-commerce helps people to get their desired items with an unlimited range of products without visiting

shops

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stores

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. Just in the same way, shopping from online

stores

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saves time and provide a better shopping experience. Nowadays people are very busy with their own work and not everyone has the spare time to visit

stores

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and

shops

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. Online shopping saves time

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customers.

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, there is no sales representative to pressurize the customers for buying products out of their interest and

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a satisfying experience. In conclusion,

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online shopping has made life a lot easier, despite

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, I think it is still better to shop physically as you will get to see, feel, make your choice and

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get the value for your money.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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253 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

landscape of retail
digital purchasing platforms
enhanced accessibility
mobility issues
competitive prices
brick-and-mortar stores
vibrant local economies
packaging waste
carbon footprint
social cohesion
community engagement

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