Do you think that place where the person grew has an influence on his accomplishments? Explain with example.

The society where we live, contribute
us
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in many ways. How does the place
influenced
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the individual on
there
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success in life? In
this
essay, I will discuss how it affects
the
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people
based on their living environment.
To begin
with, the place we lived in
can
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attribute
on
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to
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our success.
For example
, we lived in a very poor community, congested and isolated, where the only occupation is whether farming or fishing. Electricity is expensive even technology is unreachable. In
this
kind of community, it is difficult to change and reach the goals that we wanted.
In addition
, the expenses to go to university will be challenging to provide,
however
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if there is courage and
hardwork
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hard work
it might help to
fulfill
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the dreams.
On the other hand
, environment with full access to
everthing
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everything
and they can afford tuition fees
thus
, freedom to select from different known schools is a big opportunity to live in.
Therefore
, the person who wants to achieve his/her goals will be easier.
Furthermore
, there
is
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disadvantages too,
for
example
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having surrounded
with
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these modern gadgets make the individual lazy and contented
on
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what they have. Which some
people
believes education is not important anymore to find a job,
hence
they can make earnings with the use of social media. In my conclusion, it depends on how
people
recognize their capability no matter what they lived in, as long as they have determination and patience to reach their goals it is not hard to make it. It is
also
true that the achievement of their
people
will bring
the
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success
in
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their own community.
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