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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer

#activity #child #skills #creativity
Through the years teachers have tried to find innovative ways to make learning easier and fun for kids. A good way to teach youngers is not to make them feel as they need to learn;
on the contrary
, they should be feeling like they are going to make friends and share a good time together. Enjoying a good moment and
practicing
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 relaxing activities can speed the process of understanding new information.
First
, when we have fun, is easier for our brain to
asimilate
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. One example of
this
 is that people who
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 a lot and have contact with different cultures, get to learn more and easily about a different language than those who stick to a classroom because they are on a trip for relaxing, not for
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.
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, doing funny and recreative activities help us
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 relaxed and become more creative.
For instance
, big companies try to put
this
 on work for stimulating creativity in their employers by giving them a games salon where they can just spend time and play little games between them.
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 applies
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 kids too. Even though adults and infants have different learning
process
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, we all can agree
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that being
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 a calm and enjoyable environment will help everybody to feel imaginative and ready to develop new skills.
On the contrary
, being under pressure and stressed will reduce so and make us feel
opressed
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oppressed
 and uncomfortable.
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