Many people say that universities should only offer to young students with high marks, others say that they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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juvenile pupils with high
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should be allowed for higher studies by institutes.
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oppose
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with low
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think yes, everyone should get an opportunity for higher
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with, it has been argued that, only
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should get admission
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colleges despite those have do not have
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in their
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and teach make understand their
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. As pupils attain the knowledge quite easily due to their sharp brain.
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mostly learn a lot from their secondary, and ahead in universities
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topics are related to those, whatever they have learnt before, and if a teacher is teaching something related to that,
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will learn easily.
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will take time to learn and observe the topic and may
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ask again and again to
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about the topic, due to
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class will be disturbed.
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side, the opponents
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that
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everyone should get the opportunity for higher study in colleges, despite the age and the
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of all, there are
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many reasons due to which
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student
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get
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marks
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, but it does not mean that those
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are weak and unable to do higher
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are many
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who face critical conditions and problems, some may be related to
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finance and some
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family issues.
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,it can
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in exams,
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student
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got some questions out of topic which even they did not
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listen before, these things
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deduct their
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are not weak but
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because of some reason and conditions make them weak. in conclusion, it has been noticed that
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universities, despite young pupils with high
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should not underestimate those
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who have
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not good studies. according to
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, I think, colleges should give an opportunity and chance to
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them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic excellence
  • limited spots and resources
  • smoother transition
  • higher education
  • high academic achievers
  • research and academic community
  • inclusive and equitable
  • lifelong learning
  • diverse perspectives
  • enrich classroom discussions
  • university culture
  • potential for success
  • contribution to society
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