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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of modern life style. what are the advantages of this trend. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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In
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 modern life, everyone is running for time, and in fact, 24 hours in a day is not enough. To cope with
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 on-the-go lifestyle, many food companies have created meals that meet
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 requirement.
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 it helps solve the problem, it poses more risks than benefits which I will substantiate in the course of
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 essay.
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, let's look at the benefits. Nowadays, we have many food corporations making products that require a minimum of 5 minutes to cook, as compared to the process of creating a full meal which would take a couple of hours. These meals are a lifeline for many single parents working double shifts to meet the monthly requirements.
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, Nestle has created a product, Maggi Noodles, which has revolutionised convenience foods. An item that takes only 5 minutes to prepare, has the lasting effect of a full meal and can be prepared on the go, it meets all the requirements for a modern-day working household. Alternately, the main drawback of these preserved foods is that the preservatives added are not healthy for people.
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, the manufacturers, who are more interested in profit than understanding the composition of the ingredients, so add a lot of it to the product so that it will get more flavour.
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, many manufacturers use chemical dyes to make their products more attractive to the buyer. In conclusion, the drawbacks of convenience foods heavily outweigh the advantages.
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, the problem is that these drawbacks can be seen over a duration of time, and are not immediate, which makes it hard to educate the population on its devastating effects.
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