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Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, technology has been playing an indispensable role in any
kinds
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 of
activities
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. It
also
 became an essential part of
educational
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 process.
However
, some parents are against using gadgets while studying,
meanwhile
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 students are in love with
such
 methods. To start with, there are bunches of benefits to using computers during studies.
First
 of all, it is
convenience
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,
youngster
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youngsters
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do
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 not need to waste their essential time in libraries searching for particular information. All they have to do is surf the Internet,
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 takes a few minutes only.
In addition
, computers can be
the
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 supportive tool in acquiring knowledge. Nowadays realities, scholars could not survive without artificial intelligence. COVID-19 caused global quarantine and forced all educational institutions to close. During
this
 period new ways of learning
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 been found,
such
Internet
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 programs as “Zoom”, “My class” and many others.
On the other hand
,
parent’s
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 disappointment about
such
 helpers isn’t causeless. Children are quite sensitive and often become addicted to their smartphones, laptops etc.
This
 addiction is
widely-spread
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 issue, which makes kids forget about
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real life.
Besides
,
such
 activity has
influence
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 on health, especially affects people’s vision.
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