Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

Due to modern science and technologies, we are now able to stop certain old
illness
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through vaccinations. Every
children
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child
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should get the basic
immunity
dose to keep them away
fromt
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from
the
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such
desease
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disease
.
However
, not every
parents
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parent
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immunise their kids, it should be a mandatory law to do it in order
keep
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everyone healthy. There was a time,
people
used to
died
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from
the
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uncurable
desease
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disease
such
as swine flu.
Nevertheless
, with constant research of
scientist
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and doctors, we are blessed to have an antidote to prevent
such
illness.
Deseases
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Diseases
are still there, but with precautions and vaccines, we can boost our
immunity
to fight against
it
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them
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. In order to get strong
immunity
, certain doses should be taken from
the
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childhood only.
For example
, Polio drop should be given from the age of 6 months till 3 years and
two
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dose
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doses
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for swine flue during childhood only.
Antidose
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Antidote
can start working from
the
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childhood only to keep oneself away from the deadly virus.
Although
, some
people
do not care about getting one. In
this
case,
government
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should mandate to take certain doses for their kids. It should be a particular law to immunise their children to keep the nation safe. A number of
people
, due to
the
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illiteracy,
they
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are not even aware of
such
medicines and
thus
they do not opt for
it
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them
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. To encourage the
people
, how and when to get
such
vaccines, hospitals should arrange a campaign and the government should advertise it as much
to
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too
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aware them. Due to the fact that sometimes, for a number of reasons,
the
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people
decide not to get vaccines. In conclusion, parents or
family
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families
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should not have
right
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the right
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to make a decision whether to get
immunity
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vaccine for their kids or not as it is important to have it to keep them healthy.
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