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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and creativity than reading. To what extend do you agree? use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#activity #child #skills #creativity
The bar chart illustrates, analysis report conducted by using the Australian people who
lives
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 in 5 different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
 and Hobart) that use fresh
coffee
, instant
coffee
 and having tea or
coffee
 at a café’s in
last
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 4 weeks. Percentages are based on
the
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each city population. Overall, people who
has
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 tea or
coffee
 in a restaurant shows the highest
percentage
 respectively except in
Adelaide
 while purchasing fresh
coffee
 presents the lowest proportion in the same estates. Residents who have
coffee
 in cafés were showed the highest
percentage
 in Melbourne about 63% while Hobart and Sydney’s
percentage
 shows 61% and 62% respectively.
However
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 in
Adelaide
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 it shows slightly lower to comparing instant
coffee
 users.
Similarly
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 about 34% of consumers use fresh
coffee
 that
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 the lowest
percentage
 respectively in Brisbane and
Adelaide
 while other beverage consumptions were nearly doubled in the same states. Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart were illustrated about 44%, 42% and 38% while other beverage types selling more than that.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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