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Some people say that in all levels of education from primary school to university , too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on practical skills . Do you agree or disagree ? .

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"Education is a key to unlock the golden door of freedom" . Some individuals argue that the education provided to students should be mostly theorized rather than practical learning from the beginning of the course to the ending of the studies . I totally disagree with
this
 statement that too much time should be spent on learning facts .
To begin
 with ,
firstly
 , scholars can learn easily
by
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 practical learning .
For instance
 , when the student
learn
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 the theories , they just have only an idea about it like they have to use their imagination that it might be
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when they have the same theory in practical form , they are more able to remember and learn as the same is proved by many scientists .
Secondly
 , they will grab more and more knowledge .
For example
 , if a student learns from a book , he has to revise them again and again , it takes too much time some syllabus is missed by them to learn . But , if they learn practically , they can learn the things within a
second
 so they can be able to learn more and more .
However
 , the theory is
also
 important in
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 .
Although
 practical learning seeks more interest , scholars enjoy learning things practically . To illustrate , when anyone explains virtually to pupils , they do not have any stress on their mind or to be tense about the notes that how they will learn ? And how they manage their time . They are able to live a stress-free and enjoyable life and education .
In addition
 , practical learning has its own and most crucial importance . As there are many doctors who learn practically , but if they only learn theories , they would not be able to do operations . In conclusion ,
however
 , learning facts are playing a vital role in studies , practical skills have their own importance .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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