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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn about current events. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Currently,
people
 reckon that the leading method to absorb immediate occasions is
newspapers
, yet remaining
people
 will disagree with the opinion since they can absorb via different media. Personally, I believe that
this
 development has both pros and cons because of the following reasons. On the one hand, it is true that with the development of technology and science,
people
 are currently participating in the hugely varied information from different sources, and it is the key to connecting
people
 from different destinations to the newest unfamiliar information from worldwide.
Firstly
, we can easily access the news’ applications from smartphones with one click, and it will not force
people
 to spend their time commuting from
newspapers
’ shops to their houses on a daily basis.
Moreover
, due to environmental conservation, the development of using fewer products from woods or trees is the best way to maintain
people
's living standards and needs.
For example
, in lieu of utilizing
newspapers
 to absorb new events,
people
 can switch to the most comfortable and selective devices
such
 as mobile phones.
However
,
on the other hand
, nowadays,
people
 who are from remote areas and old class are sharply high, so
newspapers
also
 play an important role in transferring information. In some cases,
people
 living in rural areas
such
 as mountainous destinations, land’s areas cannot have enough conditions to access
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the internet because their destinations will be not available for using mobile phones, so newspaper is the only way for them to absorb events, yet it cannot the newest one because of the long and tortuous distance. As we can see, many old
people
 like utilizing traditional ways
such
 as reading a newspaper because old
people
 tend to have weaker and unclear vision than youngsters, so utilizing
newspapers
 is the best method for them. In conclusion, reading
newspapers
 or suffering
newspapers
 through smartphones will benefit different types of ages and classes, so it depends on the types of users.
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