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Humans are basically selfish. Write a paragraph about 300 words to state that whether you agree or disagree with the statement. Include examples and illustrations to support your viewpoint.

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There are thousands of species in the
world
 and the majority of those are not yet even been studied properly.
However
, above all humans behave in
such
 a way that they have the sole authority and the ownership of mother nature. Mankind does not have any sympathy or
care
, not only about the requirements of the other animals
,
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 but
also
 the needs of other nations from their own race. So, I do believe that humans are selfish as far as generally concerned.
Firstly
, mankind is not the owner of the planet earth. All living beings have equal rights for each and every resource of it. Despite the law of nature, we have been consuming all the resources in the
world
 without keeping any portion for the other creatures in the
world
.
For example
, we have been continuing
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deforestation throughout the period in order to establish new cities and factories.
Thus
, we have been eventually invading the living space of other animals and yet we do not have any
second
 thought about that.
Secondly
, people do not even
care
 about the rest of the nations in the
world
. The so-called developed countries keep dumping their garbage
such
 as hazardous hospital wastages and e-wastages in
third
world
 countries. They have been polluting the water and food sources of those poor countries while keeping their own streets and cities clean.
For example
, a few years back Sri Lankan Customs were able to locate plenty of containers full of hospital wastages that had been shipped from the United Kingdom. So, in my opinion, humans are the most selfish living being on earth. We do
care
 only about our selves and we don't even
care
 about any other suffering nations from the same species.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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