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Some People Think That the Government Should Establish Free Libraries in each town. Others believe that it is a waste of money since people can access the Internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is important for people to consider whether the government should provide free access to
public
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library
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libraries
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on
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 each town, or
this
 is a waste of the national expenditure because of the availability of the Internet to gain information at home.
However
, I state my view that the government should effectively invest their money
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 other projects rather than the
libraries
.
Firstly
, the
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 of
public
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 in each town
migh
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might
 help the citizen easily access
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knowledge. The fact behind
this
 because there are several
libraries
 in Vietnam located far from the
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residential
are
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area
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.
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 often
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 villagers 4-5 hours to get there to satisfy the curiosity of
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the lastest
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lastest
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 occurrence.
However
, if the library charge for
entrance
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 fee, people can not afford
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books due to
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 high price of copyright.
Secondly
, the feasibility of
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 efficiency of national projects should be taken into consideration. The reason for
this
 is that the residents, nowadays, have a tendency to stay at home surf the Internet for information
instead
 of spending time travelling to the
libraries
.
Thus
, it would be arguably worthy for making
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on
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 public services and health care.
Additionally
, while
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climate change has been exacerbated, the
the
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urgency of allocating fiscal funding to sustainable energies
such
 as solar and wind power may alleviate 
this
 issue.
As a result
, these two benefits lead to
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 the financial burden on the authority. In conclusion, 
although
 the functions of public
libraries
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 necessary,
this
 does not mean making the existence of at least one in all town is absolutely wasteful, the national budget and problems need to be addressed.
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