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The issue of protecting wild animals is kind of burden for the natural resources as they do not have any belong to live in this modern age.

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Introduction
There is a debate about the issue of protecting wild
animals
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 as a kind of burden for the natural resources as they do not have any belonging to live in
this
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 modern age. I strongly disagree with the statement as wild
animals
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 are one of the living species and protecting them is one of our responsibilities, while others argued about them.
Body paragraph 1
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 of all,
this
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 will be a bias if someone says the wild
animals
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 do not need or do not occupy any room in
this
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 world, while
animals
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 and humans shared places since the stone age. The living styles and actions of humans are the culprits for becoming fewer space for
animals
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. As the population of humans is larger year by year, they need to extend territories by taking over the forest, which are the habitats of wild
animals
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.
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, creating housing and agriculture on the land of wild
animals
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 means the lands of the original owners lose their homes.
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, as we live on their possessions without any cost, we need to share some habitats for them is a kind of common sense that every human being
must have
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.
Body paragraph 2
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, I disagree with the fact that protecting
animals
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 is a waste of resources. There are many proves that every living thing is closely related to each other and the environment in a life cycle. Every individual needs to rely on each other to balance our ecosystems.
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, if we do not precious wild
animals
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 and forests,
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 our ecosystems become break down and there will only be bad side effects for our world
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 as global warming and abnormal weather conditions caused by lack of forests and there will be no more ecological and economic importance because of no protecting wild
animals
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.
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, protecting
animals
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 is a must responsibility for us as we all are living together in the whole world.
Conclusion
In conclusion, we should do as much as we can to protect and take responsibility for the wildlife
animals
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 in order to keep our natural resources and ecosystems in balance.

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