You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter, introduce yourself say why are you interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc. Write at least 150 words.

Dear sir, I hope you are doing good. I am writing
this
letter to enquire about the sports
club
. I hear so many good things about your
club
from my friend who is already a member of the
club
. My name is Vicky and I am 29 years old, I am a sportsperson and I play cricket. I won so many trophies and championships in many national tournaments. My family recently moved to the village which is near to your
club
. After hearing so many good things from my friend about your sports
club
, I made up my mind and I want to take a subscription to the
club
but before that can you please tell me more about other facilities that you have.
Moreover
if possible can you please tell me the subscription cost and any discount if possible because my wife is
also
interested . I am looking forward to hearing soon from you. Yours sincerely, Vicky
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task achievement
Your letter is clear and achieves the task well. However, make sure to separate your ideas clearly into paragraphs to improve readability. For instance, you could start a new paragraph when talking about your background and another one when asking your questions.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your letter is good, but it can be improved by using more cohesive devices such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' etc. This will help the reader follow your points more easily.
task achievement
You have included all necessary parts of the letter, such as the introduction, the reason for writing, and the questions you have.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for the context.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear greeting and closing, which adds to the professionalism of your letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • new resident
  • engage in
  • fitness regimen
  • personal commitment
  • specific facilities
  • preferred activities
  • variety of facilities
  • membership options
  • joining fees
  • benefits
  • cost structure
  • included amenities
  • personal trainers
  • nutritional advice services
  • child-minding facilities
  • social events
  • eagerness
  • convenient time
  • discuss membership
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