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Some people think governments should spend less money on arts and invest more in education. How far do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Part 3 Which form of vehicle is more popular in your country, bikes, cars or motorcycles? Korea is actually one of the best countries in the world to explore by bicycle. Seoul has a great, long cycling route running through the heart of the city along
Han
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 River. Every time I go there, I can see many people riding a bike. Do you think air
pollution
 comes mostly from mobile vehicles? Yes, I think cars and trucks are one of the leading causes of air
pollution
. Passenger vehicles are a major
pollution
 contributor, producing significant amounts of nitrogen oxides, carbon monoxide, and other
pollution
. Do you think people need to change the way of
transportation
 drastically to protect the environment? Yes, I think we should use public
transportation
instead
 of
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 vehicle. Public
transportation
 is reducing energy consumption and harmful carbon dioxide greenhouse gas emissions that damage the environment. It uses less energy and produces less
pollution
 than comparable travel in private vehicles. How are the
transportation
 systems in urban areas and rural areas different The biggest difference between rural and urban transport is the use of privately owned and motorised modes in rural settings, versus a higher utilisation of non-motorised modes and Public Transport within urban and metropolitan areas.
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