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Some people believe that it is a good idea to continue to work at their old age. Do you agree or disagree?

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In our modern society, there has been a trend towards continuing to
work
 at their old
age
. These things would depend on myriad factors. So I strongly believe that we have many enormous benefits by going to
work
 at old
age
. There are two reasons that
people
 should not continue to
work
 at their old
age
.
First
, some nations have a law that requires a limited
age
 to
work
, and the majority of states
work
.
This
 is the reason why some
people
 retire early when they are just 55 years old.
Second
, health is not guaranteed for the jobs. It is especially true for some jobs which obligate the worker to have good health.
For example
, the construction site is not suitable for
people
 who have the aforementioned drawbacks, because they might do heavy
work
 in a polluted environment and these things will seriously decrease their health.
Although
 the thing continues to
work
 at old
age
 has the drawbacks but I opine that the advantageous issue still exists. If we decrease the number of employees from 55 to 60 too early, it will cause
the
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of
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 the growing financial burden of
this
 country. Because they do not have an
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, their ability in
work
 is active, well and productive. And
also
, they have many experiences in fields that can lead young
people
 to do those things perfectly.
In addition
, continuing to go to
work
 even at old
age
 will push for greater gender equality. In conclusion, it is a good idea for employees who have old
age
 to continue to go to
work
 and contribute their value and create more benefits for society becomes developments.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifelong employment
  • senior workforce
  • retirement age
  • pension schemes
  • financial security
  • age discrimination
  • workforce diversity
  • technological savvy
  • healthcare considerations
  • mental acuity
  • social contribution
  • intergenerational transfer of knowledge
  • quality of life
  • career longevity
  • voluntary work
  • compulsory retirement
  • flexible working arrangements
  • job market dynamics
  • dignified retirement
  • work-life balance
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