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Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, there are some disputes about emigrants. It is considered that adept and competent
people
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 from poor
countries
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 should be encouraged to emigrate to rich
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. I definitely agree with
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 view and explain why it is beneficial for both
people
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 and well-developed
countries
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.
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 of all,
people
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 who are intelligent, have a great opportunity to live and work in good conditions. They have the opportunity to work in a good condition and provide valuable facilities which make competent
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 work harder and more efficient.
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, due to that,
people
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 succeed in careers from different spheres.
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, numerous scientists from low-developed
countries
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 to the USA in order to become successful. The government of the USA encourage and appreciate scientists and give them the equipment and other valuable things to help them to develop.
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, living in rich
countries
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 rather than poor ones makes
people
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 more satisfied and happy because the economy in rich
countries
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 is higher. If skilled workers stay in their motherland, they have problems with bad living conditions,
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 as accommodation, education, food supply and other compulsory factors.
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, the flow of intelligent and professional emigrants play a crucial role in the economy of well-developed
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. Skilled
people
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 example, doctors and scientists of medicine do meaningful breakthroughs in medicine and discover some cures for different diseases.
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 significantly influences wealth economic because
countries
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 can sell them to other
countries
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 so that they earn money and become richer. In conclusion, wealthy
countries
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 should allow jobs to competent workers from poverty-stricken
countries
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. It gives the opportunity to live in satisfying conditions for
people
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 who
deserve
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.
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, the emigration of skilled
people
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 reinforces the economy of well-developed
countries
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.
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